http://www.nbcolympics.com/trackandfield/news/newsid=144223.html#peking+ducks
Although this story is one of the truly great stories to come out of the U.S. Olympic Trials in Eugene, I felt like the author could have done a better job in conveying the message. Nick Symmonds, Andrew Wheating and Christian Smith, all three of which train in E
ugene, ended up qualifying for the Olympics in the 800 meters, sending Hayward Field into a frenzy. With running being so big in Eugene, the hometown crowd couldn’t have been more proud of the three runners. The lede of the story began with the names of the three runners which was not the biggest part of the story. If I was the author’s editor, I would have had them begin with either the fact that three runners made the Olympics in the city they train in or the fact that 30,000 people showed up to watch, even though Hayward Field is only supposed to hold 16,000 after the renovation.
Even though I believe the story could have been written better, it shouldn’t take away from how special that night was at Hayward Field. Before the race began, there was excitement in the air knowing that a University of Oregon student and two members of the Oregon Track Club Elite had a real chance at qualifying for the Olympics. At the festival outside Hayward Field, people jammed in front of two Jumbotrons to see the action. When the race was over, the cheers could have been heard as far away as Portland.
Although this story is one of the truly great stories to come out of the U.S. Olympic Trials in Eugene, I felt like the author could have done a better job in conveying the message. Nick Symmonds, Andrew Wheating and Christian Smith, all three of which train in E
ugene, ended up qualifying for the Olympics in the 800 meters, sending Hayward Field into a frenzy. With running being so big in Eugene, the hometown crowd couldn’t have been more proud of the three runners. The lede of the story began with the names of the three runners which was not the biggest part of the story. If I was the author’s editor, I would have had them begin with either the fact that three runners made the Olympics in the city they train in or the fact that 30,000 people showed up to watch, even though Hayward Field is only supposed to hold 16,000 after the renovation.Even though I believe the story could have been written better, it shouldn’t take away from how special that night was at Hayward Field. Before the race began, there was excitement in the air knowing that a University of Oregon student and two members of the Oregon Track Club Elite had a real chance at qualifying for the Olympics. At the festival outside Hayward Field, people jammed in front of two Jumbotrons to see the action. When the race was over, the cheers could have been heard as far away as Portland.
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